Silence descends heavily in the wake of
your retreating footsteps,
desolate,
cruel in its unrelenting neutrality.
My thoughts are a startled murmuration
of starlings
with desperately flapping wings
resounding mournfully into the middle distance.
They settle delicately on my shoulders,
unable to bear the weight of our
existence.
We were the beginnings
of a dream,
a building crescendo,
the first strokes of a masterpiece
that fate or folly deemed never know
the fulfillment of completion.
A bitter wind sends its piercing cry
through the spaces of my ribcage.
Cold as a January frost.
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Hello and welcome to my page~
My name is Larisa--a very common Slavic name that was either derived from the Latin word hilaris, meaning "cheerful," or from the Greek city of Larissa, meaning "strong fortress."
Born in Ukraine, I emigrated with my family to America when I was still a small child and now make my home in the beautiful Pacific Northwest. Growing up immersed in two vastly differing cultures led me to have a burning curiosity about people all over the world. Stemming from said curiosity, I have fallen in love with traveling to other countries, meeting new people and delving into their culture, exploring new cities, and of course, dining on the local cuisine!
If I cannot escape into a different country, then my next favorite method of adventure is to lose myself in a spectacular book. I enjoy books of all genres--from fiction and novels, to biographies and ethnographies. As long as it captures my fancy and holds me spellbound the entire time, I will burn through the book like a forest fire! Because of this penchant for reading and travel, coupled with my love of deep and mysterious things, I have been often called a dreamer and I find the title suits me.
With that being said, I invite you to stay a while, perhaps make yourself a cup of tea and linger through my posts and feel free to comment or share a thought :-)
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That is some intense personification and is beautiful!
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Thank you! I appreciate that you stopped by and shared your thoughts β₯
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My pleasure. I’m glad to have read this.
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This was beautiful Larissa from the opening line to its finale. The way you use vivid and descriptive language is so clinical and compelling that I could picture each scene in my mind with clarity. This was a joy to read and I hope your having an amazing weekend.
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What gorgeous feedback!! Thank you, this made my day! I’m sure you already know this as a writer but sometimes I’ll post something and kind of hate it because I have edited it and stared at it too much. I kind of felt that way about this poem. So your comment is the perfect antidote! I’m doing pretty good this morning, how have you been?
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I’m doing well thank you and I know exactly what you mean. Sometimes I set myself a limit on how many times I can edit after I finished writing because I know if I keep looking I won’t publish it but I’m glad this gem was published and it was a joy to read. I hope you have an amazing week ahead!
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Oh wow, I should set limits on my compulsive editing too! I do the same thing with pictures – the more I stare at a pic of myself, the uglier it looks lol! We are our own harshest critiques, always. Thank you, I hope I have an amazing week too. Right back atcha π
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Such a feeling of utter desolation. Itβs beautiful in its despair β£οΈ
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Thank you my darlingest Rob. It is what I was going for–glad it hit its mark!
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A bullseye. β€
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Your words, as always, are a refreshing salve. β€οΈ
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That was so sweet of you to say, thank you so much! β₯
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Superbly evoked n
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I am humbled and flattered. My most sincerest gratitude to you.
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You’re welcome
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So gorgeous. I felt this, like a recent chill in side my bones. So much if life is relatable β€οΈ
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I feel that you so often put words to the chaos that can take place inside my head. And for that, you always have my gratitude β₯β₯β₯
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Beautiful! π
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Thank you so much, Robin!
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You’re very welcome! Keep writing π
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You as well!
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Thanks π
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Oh wow. This is a truly beautiful and haunting piece, Larisa. I felt every bit.
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I appreciate that, Katy! Thank you for this beautiful comment. How are you?
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You are most welcome βΊοΈ I am doing well! Just trying to make the most of this downtime during COVID… lots of reading, writing and beach-going. Today, we have a hurricane on the island, so that livens things up a bit ha! How are you doing?
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You know, I can genuinely say that I am doing well. And for that, I am eternally grateful. I hope the hurricane passes you by without any damage!
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That is wonderful to hear π The hurricane was quite anticlimactic, which is a blessing (but honestly I was hoping it would be just a tad more exciting… I love a good storm β). Hope you have a beautiful week! βΊοΈ
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Vaguely remember from Rumi “His message is only heard
in silence … “
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The silences often roar the loudest..
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“We were the beginnings
of a dream,
a building crescendo”
You’re a weaver of images! My goodness… I’m always transported to the images you create. There’s something very rich and sacred about your writing, Larisa…it comes from the place where poets are born…some magical, otherworldly dimension!
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How can I not mention this… I read the poem thrice for these lines –
“My thoughts are a startled murmuration
of starlings
with desperately flapping wings”
My heart be still! β€οΈ
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I have the largest smile on my face–I am so glad you enjoyed those lines! I have a special place in my heart for our winged counterparts of the air, and to be honest, I enjoyed those lines too. Thank you for this xoxo β₯β₯β₯
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I swear, you always know exactly what to say to make me feel like I’m going to cry and burst into a million little pieces from giddiness at the same time! That was so sweet of you, Isha!! I don’t know if there is anything I can ever say that will equal the gift that you continuously give me with your words.
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I don’t even touch the surface of what your writing makes me feel, in my expression. I’m just trying to get there πΉπΉ
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Trust me, you did.
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You write so well!
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Thank you Jay! That is very kind of you to say π
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Of course! It’s true
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Masterful phrase: βstartled murmuration of starlingsβ β the alliteration and the unusual βmurmurationβ.
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Thank you Bill, that line was particularly pleasant for me too.
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I felt your poem deeply and I got chills. Beautifully and vividly well written and from your heart. π
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I’m so flattered Charlie! That’s a visceral response. Grinning like mad over here.
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You welcome. You are such a talented and write really good poetry from your heart.
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Haunting and beautiful. This piece will echo in hearts long after it has been read.
So happy you are writing again. I am a newcomer to your blog, but I know great,
inspiring writing when I read it.
And that is definitely you Missy.
Bravo
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That was so sweet of you to say, thank you. I appreciate the encouragement to write again, it really does provide incentive to continue at times when Iβm feeling tapped out. I hope youβre doing well β₯
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Doing as well as csn be. Beautiful writers like you are needed in these difficult times.
Please, stay inspired.
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There’s so much feeling in this, every line has its own flavour.
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Thank you Simon! I appreciate your feedback.
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You’re welcome… You keeping good?
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Yes! I have actually been doing really well, I am so happy to report! I had an amazing weekend and in general Iβve been working on being an overcomer in all things, so the only way to go is up. How about you?
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That’s good to hear! Keep going up and up! I’m doing ok thanks, I’m trying to take some time off working.
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Same here. I never got to go on my vacation in May and so I havenβt had a vacation since last year and Iβm really starting to feel it.
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I think you will do. All you can do is your best to take time for you. Is there anywhere you can visit?
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Not anywhere I want to go at the moment, aside from a European destination π
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Oh yes, which European destination is that? π
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Everywhere π€© But okay, I want to go to Budapest. I want to go somewhere where I can lose myself so deeply in the arms of history. Whereβs I can practically taste all the events that occurred in the hundreds of generations before me. That is why I love Europe so much.
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Yeah if that’s what you like then Europe is the place for you, there’s a lot of history.
Are your origins from Budapest or something?
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Nope, I hail from Eastern Europe!
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Do you still feel the culture in you at all?
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I did a lot when I was younger and living with my parents. Right now, I feel that I have been able to grow past that being the defining point for myself.
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So you’re able to live and accept your culture and take it with you to live your own life?
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I am still definitely Ukrainian, but I am able to empathize with all people from all walks of life. We are not so different from each other.
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I agree, we’re not much different and living together shouldn’t be difficult.
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I do love this line… “My thoughts are a startled murmuration
of starlings”
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..going this way and that. Thank you Martin, that line is also a favorite of mine and I appreciate that you enjoy it too.
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Still breathtaking now as then. Another wonderful piece brimming with visceral imagery that strikes such universal chords. Beautiful!
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That was sweet of you, Tom, thank you!
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Wow!! The grave gravity of your words. It’s hauntingly beautiful…!! β€
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Thank you Kazi, I appreciate your feedback!
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You are most welcome Larisa…!! π
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This is an eloquent masterpiece!! Beautiful!!
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Thank you, I appreciate this comment π
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Reblogged this on Creative Writing Course: How to Write Creatively and commented:
https://craigsbooks.wordpress.com/2020/08/20/the-sound-of-silence-2/
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Always so gorgeous and so deep Larisa! Thank you for being you! πππ
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Kevin π₯Ί that was so sweet! Thank you π©ππ»
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You are very welcome! π
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